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face character more friendly and fun but still inline with your character.
color change more solid and stand out.
what do you thing?
any other suggestion?
-Remove the red and yellow lines, dots and hearts from outside the face.
-Change the eye so it is similar to ours. Start with changing red to black and a smaller pupil.
It looks like instead of using our fish head, you completely remade our fish head which is really amazing! This tells me you have a lot of talent and control of this design and we should be able to get this where it needs to go.
-First is lose the extra hearts and lines around the face. Now that you are using the actual face, those parts aren't needed and clutter the space.
-Next is you made the eyes red and this makes the fish seems a little evil or angry. We had the same problem with our original logo and when we got it to where the face looks nice and happy the whole thing was better. So make the fish happier! haha Also the lines on the face on ours is black and you made them red.
-The body is great and the sign with the Powered by.. is also great!
-I like this version of the text better than #37 so stick with that, but both of the other artist's have fonts and text layouts that we like more. I'd really like to see this character you made with a font layout like the other ones. Are you able to see the other submissions? If you cant, start with bringing down Brovies down behind Hole in the Wall a bit so its tighter and overlaps more. Also try a version without the white outline inside the black outline.
-When you send your next submissions can you send the Character on its own & the Text on its own & and a version with both together.
I like the font on this much better than your other new design. I'd like to see it without the flag background. Play with the lettering a little. Try switching the green and the red. Also try Brovie without ALL CAPS. There is another version of the lettering submitted that we prefer right now.
As for the mascot. There is so much I like about the body and especially the way you use the sign to say Powered By.. Thats really great! I'd like to see the head switched out with our fish head the way another submission is presenting it. With the hat and mustache added. It looks like we are headed in the direction of having 3 parts to this that we would like to eventually have isolated out anyway to use for various marketing on the concept - The text only logo, the mascot only, and the Text and Mascot together.
Nice work, excited to see where this goes!
This a great start! I like the Brovie Italian font. Hole in the Wall doesn't need the "quotes" and those 3 lines should look a little tighter. The fish head as the apostrophe seems out of place. For the chicken, I really like it but that mascot is specific to our chicken concept, it doesnt have a place on this one. I really like the use of the sign like that, it would be great if you were able to make an Italian Chef or waiter with the same type of imagery thats on the fish and chicken. But it would be something that was specific to this concept.
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what do you thing?
any other suggestion?
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please check it out....
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face character more friendly and fun but still inline with your character.
color change more solid and stand out.
what do you thing?
any other suggestion?
B 1st rgd, mbahdjoyo
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-Remove the ornament from outside the face.
-Change the eye red to black and a smaller pupil.
what do you thing?
any other suggestion?
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please check it out.
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Thin out the black outline a bit and remove the shadow on the floor
any other suggestion?
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-Change the eye so it is similar to ours. Start with changing red to black and a smaller pupil.
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face edited more friendly but still inline with your character.
font edited more closely
any other suggestion...
also you can check the version separately on entry #47 and #48
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you can check your request on entry #46
please take a look..
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-First is lose the extra hearts and lines around the face. Now that you are using the actual face, those parts aren't needed and clutter the space.
-Next is you made the eyes red and this makes the fish seems a little evil or angry. We had the same problem with our original logo and when we got it to where the face looks nice and happy the whole thing was better. So make the fish happier! haha Also the lines on the face on ours is black and you made them red.
-The body is great and the sign with the Powered by.. is also great!
-I like this version of the text better than #37 so stick with that, but both of the other artist's have fonts and text layouts that we like more. I'd really like to see this character you made with a font layout like the other ones. Are you able to see the other submissions? If you cant, start with bringing down Brovies down behind Hole in the Wall a bit so its tighter and overlaps more. Also try a version without the white outline inside the black outline.
-When you send your next submissions can you send the Character on its own & the Text on its own & and a version with both together.
Thank you!
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any other suggestion?
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Head change to your fish head with chef hat and mustache
and color change on text.
any other suggestion?
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please take a look your request on entry #37
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please take a look your request on entry #37
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As for the mascot. There is so much I like about the body and especially the way you use the sign to say Powered By.. Thats really great! I'd like to see the head switched out with our fish head the way another submission is presenting it. With the hat and mustache added. It looks like we are headed in the direction of having 3 parts to this that we would like to eventually have isolated out anyway to use for various marketing on the concept - The text only logo, the mascot only, and the Text and Mascot together.
Nice work, excited to see where this goes!
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am I in right direction?
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you can check your request on entry #17
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any feedback for my entry?
just let me know if you have any suggestion and I will HELP you to make revision.
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