Ok, here's what I think. The design needed some symmetry foremost. It's a tricky logo to balance, and I think that was the key here. Secondly, it needed some weight at the bottom, so I added a simple flowing design (grren on
#115 and black to red on
#116), just enough to balance but not take away from the central focus of the design. I like the font the more I look at it. I think anything thinner may get lost, and if you wanted to reproduce this on a business card or the web, if nothing else, the name should still be readable. If you look at
#116, you see I added black behind the wings. I think this gives the design a bit more edge. I'm curious to see what you think, but I think right now
#116 is it, compare it to
#55 and see how much more everything pops......or maybe I am thinking too much :)