Interesting! Would you mind incorporating a bit of blue (from the original) and perhaps softening it up just a bit? This is slightly (and I emphasize slightly) modern and if you could slightly back off the architectural feel, I'd love to see what you came up with. Great job, thank you!
In blue as requested...let me know if there are any other changes you'd like to see. I'm going to be out of town for the weekend, but will work to get you changes if you have any.