Thank you for this entry and your participation with this contest! I think you might be able to strength this entry a bit by making the watermark or element in the background more descriptive. I think this concept can work, think it could pop a little more in the design - along with the slogan.
I hope you find this feedback useful - please let me know if I can be of assistance.
Hey there - thank you very much for the feedback. It was very helpful. I have reworked the elements you mentioned. Please let me know if this is heading in the right direction. I would be happy to continue working on this with you.