I like #58. I like the target behind the body. I feel like hte wording has to be crisper and targeted bolder. I also really like the concept of getting some red into it to make the whole logo punch out more. Have you looked at the basic logos that we put onto our site?
http://www.targetedfatloss.com.au/logotournament It will give you an even better idea of what we are looking for. I think what we have and what you have can easily be combined into something great. Look forward to seeing your ideas. Thanks.