Sunny and LunaLogo Design Contest

Hi there, Thank you for choosing me as a finalist and giving feedback, how about my design this one?
Please give me feedback so we can cooperate well. Feel free to request change to me,
I will work as much as possible for you.
I am waiting for good news from you.

Thanks and best regards.

like this?

Love this! Can you do a version of this with white background and navy logo?