#8 is my fave though "promotions" would need to be bolder and a bit larger as if we were to embroider text needs to be at least 1/4" tall and can't be too thin. I do like that font you used for "promotions" just not for the logo. :-)
#23 Don't care for the star and promotions would have to be bigger. I do like this one, but honestly, it would be hard to do on a lot of promotional products because of the tight, small font. Cute, but really like others better.
#13 and #14 Don't care for the star.
Definitely have a good grasp though, of the "look" we are going for. :-)