Lori BonazzoliLogo Design Contest

These are in the right zone but if you can please make the eye more dramatic, more feminine, inward slopes to points - google "Dramatic Egyptian eye makeup" - very good on the legible text, try more there

great work so far

Hello Lori,
Thanks for the rank and comment. :)
OK i will revise it...

Cheers!

These are all so great but can you possibly make the eye itself more "sexy", like if the eye were turned a 1/4 turn so the point of the eye was more down and the lashes were more dramatic toward the top, does this make sense? the eye as you have it is straight on... I love what you are doing just want it to be more feminine and curved. see this image http://cdn2.stylecraze.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/09/Mineral-Eye-MAkeup-For-Egyptians.jpg

I love the illustration and where you have taken this, just turn it and dramatize it a bit and it's right there, thanks!

Ok, i will make the new alternative in the next entries.

Cheers!

I feel you are so close just missing the eye elements that make it more dramatic... maybe look at this dragon eye http://cf067b.medialib.glogster.com/media/6e/6eeb91e7241008d4f5d2b6811353abac40852dfff522a09e77b9ba8212c5d78c/dragon-2.jpg

See the angle of it, this is what we want for the eye itself

Please use a sharp edge for all outlines

I would say the figure is not working, stick to just the dramatic eye of horus and the lettering and you will be there, thank you!

Hi Lori,
OK i will make it now...thanks for giving me this example.
I admit, it's kind a hard to make it to be suitable as you imagine.
But i will try the next entries...I hope it'll be the one that you looking for..

Thanks for your time!

Cheers!

Can you please keep at it with #76 but can you provide one where all is filled, no distressed or broken lines

Please try to take text to right of symbol, also in text no distressed or broken lines, all sharp and clean

Also for #76 thicker, thicker to thinner points, very thick and clean edges to very wispy and refined points

also please try without outside circle around it

Hi Lori.. :)
I'm back now. It's quite great weekend!
OK, no problem i will make it all...

Cheers!