I like where you are going with this, probably needs refined now that we have identified Tag Line and Theme. Roman Army Theme, Tag Line is "Veni Vidi Vici" see my contest updates for more info.
Need to darken the font and make it like the SPQR font that if you google "roman army spqr" you will see. Also in regards to separating Veni, Vidi, Vici instead of commas, please use the diamonds like hyphens midway up instead of low. You will see them in the SPQR as well.
its still hard to read the Legion Leads on the shield. I like this but it needs to be refined more for it to be a contender. It's #2 but I'm considering dropping it to #7. Please try and refine this idea soon and make the lettering easily readable.