Nice solid design ... I'm really looking forward to more of your creative ideas! Only specific general comment on this treatment is that it's a bit formal. Boater's are a casual crowd and mixing up colors and text will liven things up and make it much more appealing to the event attendees. Also please continue to review my on-going high-level general comments and tips, made to the entire group in the LogoTournament Brief. These are very important. Great job so far! Thanks and best, Mark
I really like this twist! A nice depiction of a trawler and one of the few entrants with a trawler versus a sailboat. You've got one killer however! Trawlers are notoriously slow (but roomy and comfortable, thus very popular) ... so the flaming leap through a hoop look has to go. :-) But strangely, one of the things the event has to contend with is these two boat-types and their respective owners ... what I mean is, do you include a sailboat and not a trawler on the logo, or vice-versa. Do you think you could straighten up the hoop, or even use the mast of a sailboat, to have both boats in your logo? Either going the same way, or one looking left and the other right. Know it's a kooky idea but it might just work? And that would make everyone happy. Dare to dream! [wink]
Sorry, my fault, I must have miscommunicated ... neither boat is considered fast at all. No big flaming wakes and no flaming hoops please.
What may work is imagine the mast of the sailboat, dead on from the side (like the trawler in #65). The hoop now becomes a vertical line (visually extended or graphically "tied in" to the sailboat mast). So you have half a sailboat looking one way (say 9 o'clock) ... and half of a trawler (in 65) looking the other way (say 3 o'clock).
Don't change the trawler image. It's perfect! Now you just have to capture a cruising sailboat in the same complimentary style.
That would put both types of boats on top of your HSR text lines. Equality for all ;-)
Good cruising sailboat image! Goes really well with your trawler! Now what would you like to do to make it a little less complex and "more wave and less flame"? I'm liking this much better now and I bet the rest of the group will also.
I just got off the phone with the group (believe me, that was interesting!) and here's what everyone would like to see for your next iteration. As you would imagine, some people liked a certain aspect of one of your treatments and others like another aspect. As best as I can interpret this, 85's use of the two boats was highly preferred and the two colors for the different boats in 97 or 95 worked. I explained to everyone that you were working on losing the hoop and flames and developing the waves and "separating" the boats more and they were enthusiastic. Thanks!
Thank you! Nice changes! I really think we're on the right track here now. Maybe the icon and the text look a bit "unconnected" now. They seem great together, the icon as a badge, and the text as a sold shelf. This probably happens to you a lot when the clients take a piece from here, a piece from there ...
What I think might work well is if you enlarge the icon and make it a semi-circle representing the sun, maybe picking up from the right stroke of the H and the left stroke of the N ... or maybe the A and the O? Whatever you think works best. Then the sun-shape would be setting on Hampton, and your great boats would be bigger and look more integrated to the entire design.
I have someone in the number 1 slot now so they can upload their submission, just let me know when you're ready to go and I'll swap you in. Thanks again and best, Mark
I think these are VERY VERY good. Let's work with Entry #154 and I'd only ask for one more thing before I show them to everyone tomorrow afternoon.
I know that a few of the committee members are really touchy about the text treatment in several of the designer concepts. They have commented that the words/text lead with a city, and then an event ... as if Hampton was the primary thing ... versus an event, that happens to take place in a city. I'm sure you know what I mean.
Can you look at how some of the other designers have now "stacked" the H S and R to remedy this. It's been popular with the group.
HAMPTON SNOWBIRD RENDEZVOUS
Of course you'll have to change the font size and letter spacing or something else you favor because H S and R all have different character counts, but have to end up about the same length.
Let's give them the best effort you and I can muster together and then we'll see what they think!
Hi JMC! Thanks for working so hard on our logo. It was a really close contest and you should know that a lot of the folks really liked your design. My wife, Diana, founded a citizen-science project for seabird conservation and we're going to do a logo for her later this year. You can bet that you'll get an invite and I hope that you'll choose to enter that contest. Look for an invite from me and the SeaBC Seabird Count. Best and thank you again, Mark (mark@onthewaterchartguides.org)