I like where your heads at on these designs. They're fresh and striking and clean, I'm wondering though if we could see a couple different color variations, feeling greys, blacks, crimson, whites, possibly the light-blues...great first mock up! Thanks for joining the competition.
I would still love to see another mock-up from you if you're willing...I like the mod/retro look this has, would love to rework it a bit and see if we can land in the same ball park. Thanks for your time.
Here are couple of new ideas. I hope these ones getting closer to your imagination. The style and typeface can be easily change, please let me know if you want to see more variations.