#19 #20 hmm.. 'b' + 'o' actually balances better than 'b' + 'p'.. and the grey thing looks out of sync.. guess it was a wrong direction, sorry
i was thinkin, if you move the dots inside 'b' and 'p' to upper-left, it will change a focal point. am i too theoretical? :) and make only 'p' and a circular pattern in orange, it might help
frankly, looks like you need some radical changes to make it a winner, perhaps make it havier / less airy / more condenced, be more creative with the background