If you could have the text spaced out between Business and Partner (no S) more like #2, I think this could work. Also, lessen the Now and italicize it like #2. Last, please reduce the size of the icon and lower it a bit toward the letters.
Your first design is what we like. We like the "Now" smaller like Sculptor has done. Put a few spaces in between Business and Partner, keep the Now on the second line and italicize and reduce size of "now". Do not like all the text together as you have done.
It's Partner, not Partners. Can you make the hands a little less discernable, a little more discreet and subtle so that they are hard to notice that they are hands.
Also, let's try the now in lowercase. I would also suggest a different Font for Business Partner, more like Sculptor's font.