My partner likes submission 47 as her overall favorite. For me, it's number 2 or 3. My issue is the icon. I love its simplicity and elegance, however I don't think it does enough to communicate female beauty. In other words, from my point of view, the profile is too generic or vague in its interpretation. Several competing designers have used a sketch or silhouette of a female's shape or form to various degrees of success. Is there a way to incorporate such a visual within the sphere instead of the profile?
#47 is still one of our favorites but could we see other script or hand-drawn fonts for "Among"? The one used in this submission is an improvement over the original and much closer to what we want, yet it seems very common. Almost like this is a font that comes pre-loaded on Adobe Illustrator. That's not a negative per se; it's just that I'd like to see a less common looking font.
As for the slogan, I'd like to see it slightly more readable. And by that I mean a slightly larger font, a slightly darker tone of grey, or a combination of the two. I will say that as it appears now, the tracking is nicely proportional to the font size and doesn’t require a change.
Yes, that's much more like I had in mind. I'll talk to my partner and make sure she sees these within the next few hours. Thank you for your quick response.
My partner likes this version, but I'm still having problems with the female shape. Maybe it's because of the lack of symmetry. Regardless I'd still like to see the font with a more literal A in the Beauty, and instead of such an ornate script font, perhaps something that seems artsy...maybe that appears as brush strokes....though not calligraphy. We also both agree we'd like to have the pictorial placed above the name and centered.
This submission does a better job of communicating a female among nature. The silhouette is clearly feminine but the raised arm is confusing or distracting. Perhaps there’s an alternate female form to utilize? I like the half circle because it’s both a design element and could be interpreted as the moon, the sun, or even earth and all of this does a nice job of communicating “feminine beauty juxtaposed with beautiful scenery”. That said, I don’t like the use of a butterfly or clover because they seem too cliché.
And my concerns for the fonts as discussed with design #7 are still applicable.
To summarize I like the look of the sphere in designs 4-7, but I like the clarity of message with designs 1-2. Is there a way to make the sphere communicate in the manner of versions 1-2?
There are elements of designs 4-7 that I like but I think overall it doesn't do enough to communicate our 3 primary messages: concept of artist and muse, high quality fine art, and feminine beauty juxtaposed with beautiful scenery.
The pictorial mark is creative and pretty, but I’m concerned it confuses the message more than clarifies. For example: is the profile a woman’s (my preference), a man’s or gender neutral? Or perhaps it’s two profiles? What are the two items that bracket it...hands, leaves, or simply an abstract design element? And is it encapsulated in something symbolic such as planet earth, or is this also a design element? My point is I don’t know so it’s likely my target audience won’t know, which means it’s not doing anything to communicate our message. Is there a way to alter this pictorial so that it better communicates our needs?
As for the fonts, I like your contrasting use of modern and classic styles. However I’d like to see a slightly less modern font for Beauty. The use of the letter “A” creates a division in the word and it bothers me that I keep reading the word “Be”. The font seems more futuristic, than contemporary. I prefer the latter. I like the script font for “Among”, however I’d prefer something a little less ornate….especially the “A”.
Overall these 4 versions are preferred over any other design submissions, but I wouldn’t select any of them in their current versions. Hopefully I've given you more input to work with.
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I have changed the font for "Among" also made slogan more bigger. Please check #105 #106 #107 #108 #109 #110 #111 #112. Thanks...
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As for the slogan, I'd like to see it slightly more readable. And by that I mean a slightly larger font, a slightly darker tone of grey, or a combination of the two. I will say that as it appears now, the tracking is nicely proportional to the font size and doesn’t require a change.
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Many thanks for your feedback. Will do it soon. Please wait.
Best regards,
Dodi
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Many thanks for your feedback. I made revisions. Please check my new submissions in #24 #25 #26. How about with these?
Best regards,
Dodi
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And my concerns for the fonts as discussed with design #7 are still applicable.
To summarize I like the look of the sphere in designs 4-7, but I like the clarity of message with designs 1-2. Is there a way to make the sphere communicate in the manner of versions 1-2?
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The pictorial mark is creative and pretty, but I’m concerned it confuses the message more than clarifies. For example: is the profile a woman’s (my preference), a man’s or gender neutral? Or perhaps it’s two profiles? What are the two items that bracket it...hands, leaves, or simply an abstract design element? And is it encapsulated in something symbolic such as planet earth, or is this also a design element? My point is I don’t know so it’s likely my target audience won’t know, which means it’s not doing anything to communicate our message. Is there a way to alter this pictorial so that it better communicates our needs?
As for the fonts, I like your contrasting use of modern and classic styles. However I’d like to see a slightly less modern font for Beauty. The use of the letter “A” creates a division in the word and it bothers me that I keep reading the word “Be”. The font seems more futuristic, than contemporary. I prefer the latter. I like the script font for “Among”, however I’d prefer something a little less ornate….especially the “A”.
Overall these 4 versions are preferred over any other design submissions, but I wouldn’t select any of them in their current versions. Hopefully I've given you more input to work with.