Thank you for your prompt response to my first contest.
You've taken an interesting approach, and I see where you are going with this. However, my potential clients are very business and bottom-line oriented. These are a bit too whimsical for that group. I need something more serious and less playful.
I've looked at your portfolio, and it is apparent you have done that kind of work in the past.
The following should have appeared in our brief but did not:
We use a metaphor of a client's company as a spear. Its sales team…the inflection point with the customer…is at the spearhead. Proactive, well-trained sales people are the very tip....the sharpest point.